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You were invited by a friend to go on a holiday together, but you couldn't attend.Write a letter: •apologize for not being able to join them on the holiday •explain the reason why you couldn't attend •suggest another time or activity to meet and spend time together

Dear John, I hope
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 letter will find you well. I am writing
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 letter. It's a shame that I
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 a terrible mistake with you and feel sorry
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that you were invited by a friend to go on holiday together, but you couldn't attend because I am very busy. First and foremost, I would like to personally apologize for your inconvenience.
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, even if it is an unforgettable event in my life, I would like to vanish my faults
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 time.
To sum up
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, I hope that you will take
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 consideration and ask for forgiveness. As it is hugely necessary for me. Thank you for
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 and patience. I look forward to receiving from you your
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 and warmest regards. I hope that you will take into consideration and ask for forgiveness. As it is hugely necessary for me. Thank you for
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 and patience. I look forward to receiving from you.Yours sincerely. John Svevo

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coherence and cohesion
Try to clearly separate your thoughts into distinct paragraphs. Each paragraph should contain a single main idea related to the overall purpose of the letter.
task achievement
Make sure to clearly state the reason for your inability to attend the holiday without ambiguity. Clarifying your schedule would make it more relatable.
coherence and cohesion
Polish the language to sound more natural and sincere. Avoid repetitive phrases and ensure your ending is more connected to the main content of the letter.
greeting and closing
You have a strong opening and closing structure that is polite and friendly.
task achievement
You express regret for not being able to attend, which shows consideration for your friend.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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