Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban area centers. Do you think the advantaged outweigh the disadvantages?

There is no doubt that, these days, it is commonly believed that it is better for
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organisations and operations to transfer their locations to outside modern countries. At the same time, others hold the opposite view, thinking there are no problems if they
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not move. In
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essay, both points of view will be discussed. On the one hand, it is considered by several people and experts it would be safer to change factory and company regions because they hold a
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the citizens who are living within large countries.
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as air pollution and crowded streets because
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and numerous people who are going to their workplace
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, it is more expensive to
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any large size facility inside a vital city.
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, the prices of commercial or industrial products will
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more.
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statistics by Harvard University, 15٪ of؜ supermarket prices outside Canada
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city centre in 2023.
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, it is a suitable option to relocate these company regions.
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, it is argued by some people, specifically organisation CEOs ,
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and complex process to
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operations to the countryside
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of the capital city.
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,
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potential risks on agricultural lands because some materials
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have
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impact on them.
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, there is no mistake
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idea. It
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several benefits for both
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and society.
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, governments should be careful
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process to avoid any
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task achievement
Clarify your position at the beginning of the essay to strengthen your argument.
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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that all sentences in the paragraph are related to this idea for better coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Revise sentence structures for clarity and avoid minor grammatical errors.
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You provide relevant examples and touch on important points related to the advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a logical progression of ideas, which helps the reader follow your arguments.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Balanced regional development
  • Overconcentration
  • Housing affordability
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental benefits
  • Skilled labor
  • Logistics
  • Operational efficiency
  • Urban sprawl
  • Ecosystems
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