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Experts believe that, over the next decade, robots will be doing many of the jobs currently done by humans. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this

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 day and age with artificial intelligence and automation processes growing ever more popular many
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 are concerned about retaining their jobs. On one
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 AI enthusiasts celebrate
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 change by saying that humans are liberated from tedious and futile work,
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 on the other,
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 losing their jobs to robots is never a good thing.
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 essay will explore both concerns. To start off, historically,
people
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 have always looked for ways to improve and automate routine tasks, saving themselves from
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 barren nature
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,
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 simultaneously improving the efficiency of completing said tasks.
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 is exactly why the
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Industrial Revolution
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 happened, machines were introduced that could improve production and save
people
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 from hard labour. Evidently, what we see in today's world is much of the same revolution,
people
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 are being spared from the tediousness and are allowed to do something more meaningful,
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 improving their quality of life and sense of purpose.
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, the introduction of robots in the workplace hasn't been so jolly for everyone. In the case of Spotify 15 hundred employees were laid off because the CEO decided to use AI for their graphics design among other things.
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, we see more and more companies using artificially generated material in their ad campaigns, which eliminates the need for individuals with certain
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 backgrounds. Meaning that for some the world didn't start shining in more vibrant, purposeful colours, but
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 it became much harder to find a decent job.
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, having looked at both advantages and disadvantages, it becomes clear that more often than not, employees are left jobless because of the AI takeover.
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 robots excel at completing routine tasks, they shouldn't completely steal jobs and entire job markets from
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While your introduction effectively sets up the discussion, consider elaborating on the specific advantages and disadvantages you plan to discuss. This will give the reader a clearer road map for your essay.
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The transition between your points could be smoother. Using linking phrases can help guide the reader more fluidly from one idea to the next.
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Strengthen your conclusion by summarizing both the main points and restating your position or recommendation to reinforce what you've discussed.
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Your essay presents a balanced view of the topic, acknowledging both the positives and negatives of robot integration into the workforce.
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The historical context you provided adds depth to your argument regarding the automation of tasks.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • cost-effective
  • job displacement
  • economic impact
  • skill gap
  • high-skilled labor
  • workplace safety
  • ethical concerns
  • technological advancement
  • human resources
  • retraining programs
  • hazardous environments
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