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The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by four vehichles

The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by four vehichles
The line graph gives information about the amount of nitrogen oxide
emissions
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 (in grams per
km
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) produced by four different vehicles (
buses
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,
lorries
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,
petrol
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cars
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, and
diesel
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cars
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) at various speeds from 10 to 130
km
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 per hour.
Overall
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,
buses
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 and
lorries
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 produce the most
emissions
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,
while
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diesel
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 and
petrol
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cars
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 release much less nitrogen oxide. It is
also
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 clear that
buses
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 and
lorries
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 show more changes depending on speed,
while
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cars
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 remain more stable. At 10
kph
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,
buses
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 produce the highest amount of
emissions
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, around 40
g
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/
km
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, followed by
lorries
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 at approximately 35
g
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/
km
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. As speed increases,
emissions
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 from both
buses
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 and
lorries
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 decrease and reach their lowest points at around 70–80
kph
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, with
lorries
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 falling to about 20
g
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/
km
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. After that, their
emissions
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 increase again, and
buses
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 end at around 42
g
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/
km
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 at 130
kph
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.
In contrast
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,
petrol
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 and
diesel
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cars
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 emit much less nitrogen oxide.
Petrol
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cars
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 stay steady at about 10
g
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/
km
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, with a slight increase after 100
kph
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.
Diesel
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cars
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 are the lowest among all, staying under 7
g
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/
km
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 across all speeds.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, km, buses, lorries, petrol, cars, diesel, kph, g with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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