Some people think that there is too much advertising in our daily lives. Do what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays advertising has become a real dilemma for
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society
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, I believe that
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has taken an invasive and harmful form for mental
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essay will explain how invasive and harmful advertising can be in
society
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. Advertising can be very invasive since as
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society
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, we normalise the fact that we put trust
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everything we see on posters, TV, social media and commercials. On one hand, we are promised perfect results, on another hand, it can be overwhelming the fact that we are constantly disappointed because we make certain expectations that are not necessarily true.
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, on
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I constantly see skincare products that promise glass skin, and when I actually take the time to see the ingredients, I
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how many chemicals it has, meaning that
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is
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more harmful than
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looks
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, not only chemically, but affecting our trust and mental
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. As advertising can be invasive, it can
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affect our mental
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by causing expectations about products, loads and even lifestyles, which leads us to always search for perfection,
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, influencers post a lot about their lifestyles, making us unconsciously want that.
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, even though advertising can be used as a tool, it has become really invasive for
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, harming our trust, mental
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and relations with social media TV and everywhere we notice
advertisement
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advertisements
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Provide a more detailed conclusion that summarizes the main arguments.
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Effective use of personal examples, such as skincare products on TikTok, to illustrate points.
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Clear stance on the issue of invasive advertising, expressed strongly in the introduction.

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