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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.
The line chart illustrates the number of overseas tourists visiting three different areas in a European country from 1987 to 2007, measured in thousands.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the number of visitors to the lakes started at 10
thousand
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 in 1987 and increased to 70
thousand
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 by 2002.
In addition
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, the mountain areas experienced a slight increase from a smaller base,
whereas
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 the coast
initially
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 attracted the most visitors but
then
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 followed a trend of fluctuating numbers. Specifically, the coastal area saw a significant jump in tourist numbers, reaching approximately 80
thousand
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 between 1992 and 2002, after which it experienced a massive drop from 70
thousand
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 to 50
thousand
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. The lakes attracted the most tourists
initially
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, starting from 40
thousand
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 in 1987 but
then
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 showed a wide fluctuation before growing significantly to roughly 80
thousand
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. Meanwhile, tourist visits to the mountains started at 20
thousand
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 in 1987 and grew consistently to reach a peak
at the end
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 of the period

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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