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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of expenses on fuel by people in different countries USA and
UK
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the UK
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 and it's divided into three categories ( poorest, middle income and richest).
Overall
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, it is evident from the graph that the two countries have an opposite pattern.
In addition
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,
United
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the United
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 States has the
higher
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highest
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 percentage of consumption petrol in
majority
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the majority
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 of the period.
To begin
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 with a detailed analysis, the
frist
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first
 category,poorly individuals, there was a significant increase in spending
fuel
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on fuel
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 by Americans people from just under 4% to about 5.3%.
According to
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United
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the United
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 Kingdom population, the proportion of gasoil witnessed gradually increasing from half and claiming to approximately 2.2%.
Secondly
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 ,
the
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in the
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 category of middle income,
United
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the United
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 States experienced declining
by
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of
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 1% ,
whereas
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ratio
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the ratio
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 of oil in Britain went up by a
further
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 almost half and in
rising
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the rising
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 category decreased by 1%.
While
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 richer individuals in
USA
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the USA
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 expended declining
until
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to
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 2.3%,

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • disparities
  • evolved
  • fluctuations
  • stabilization
  • significant gap
  • trends
  • economic conditions
  • vehicular technology
  • public transportation
  • summarise
  • comparison
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