The diagram below shows the life cycle of the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Beka

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Beka
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the life cycle of the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Beka
The process diagram below illustrates
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life
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the life
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span of the salmon.
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,
this
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a
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seven stages, natural ,cyclical process. It begins
from
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eggs and
finishing
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with a fully grown spawning fish.
According to
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the picture, the salmon’s
life
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cycle begins with the eggs laid in fresh water, which take about 3 months to hatch and give birth to alevins feeding on yolk-sac
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several subsequent weeks. Within the following steps of the process, an alevin develops into a fry
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between 5 and 10 weeks old, has the appearance of fish and is able to swim. Several months later, a fry grows into a parr whose body has ‘finger’ markings, and at the age of at least 1-3 years
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the parr becomes the smolt which is characterized by grouping with other smolts and heading out to sea. The concluding stages of
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life
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cycle involve an adult salmon that normally spends 1 to 8 years at sea and a spawning adult whose
life
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culminates in spawning new eggs and dying
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2 weeks afterwards.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words life with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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