Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the worlds fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, you can
travel
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to every corner of the earth by
airplane
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aeroplane
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. Sometimes
this
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ways
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way
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of travelling
quite
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expensive, but it is less
time consuming
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time-consuming
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.
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,
i
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am totally disagree
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totally disagree
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with the statement
like
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that
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air
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travel
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should be banned,
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it is
a
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the
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main reason behind
poppution
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population
pollution
and
sort
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sorting
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out
if
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of
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fuel. The main reasons with examples
further
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elaborated in ensuing paragraphs.
The first
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and foremost
is
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air
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travelling
save
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our quality time.
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with, if you want to
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one
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from one
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place
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to
other
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another place
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place
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by road or by boat, so it
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two times more time than
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take
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by aviation.
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, in India, if you want to
travel
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from Lashmir
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Lashmir
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Kashmir
to Kanyakumari by
vehicles
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vehicle
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it's
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it
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take
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takes
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upto
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up to
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36hours
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36 hours
,
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by
flights
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only 5 hours.
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,
roam
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to
other
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another place
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place
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,
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it is quite difficult by road and navy,
it
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apply
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is possible
through
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by
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air
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the air
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. So, with the help of flights, it i possible to move to any
place
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all around the world. On
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, there are some disadvantages of airspace like it
increase
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increases
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pollution all over the world and it
is required
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requires
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high
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a high
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amount of
fuels
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fuel
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for them to run.
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, in
todays
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today's
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world engineers introduced
high tech
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airship
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airships
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, which
is
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consume less fuel and less amount of carbon dioxide emission into the environment.
To Conclude
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it can be
commented
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that
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there are some drawbacks
of
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to
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air
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travels
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travel
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like high pollution and consume lots of fuels, but banned for use it
not
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is not
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enough solution. we have to find more ways for power required for running jet engine.

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language
Improve grammar and spelling throughout the essay to enhance clarity. For example, "poppution" should be "pollution", and "it is take" should be "it takes".
task response
Strengthen your thesis statement in the introduction to clearly reflect your viewpoint. Instead of saying you 'totally disagree', consider rephrasing to specify your nuanced opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Use more transitions in your paragraphs to improve flow between ideas and strengthen coherence, such as 'Furthermore' or 'Additionally' to connect your thoughts more effectively.
task response
You present a clear position on the topic, asserting that you disagree with the idea of banning air travel.
task response
You provide a relevant example of travel time differences between road and air travel, which supports your main argument about efficiency.

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