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The death penalty should be abolished in all countries.do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays there is more controversy about the practice of
death
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punishment
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 across the
world
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.
although
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some
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the
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death
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 penalty Have some benefits, in
my
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apply
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opinion
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i
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I
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am agree
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agree
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with
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apply
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that criminals should get the
punishment
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 of
death
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in
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apply
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arround
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around
 the
world
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.but few
are
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do
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 not agree with
this
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 statement.
in
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this
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 essay we are going to see both
perspective
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perspectives
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 in
details
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detail
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.
To begin
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 with,there is a majority of the criminals
arround
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around
 the
world
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.who have done bad work against the society. If someone is called
as
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a criminal
deffinenty
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diffidently
 they stand for
punishment
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.if they don't get any
punishment
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 crime
rashion
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fashion
. will increase.
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for
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For
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 example if someone
killed
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kills
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other person
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another person
other people
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 he should get the
punishment
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.
otherwise
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public
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the public
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 will behave in
same
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the same
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 way.
Secondly
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 if
criminal
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a criminal
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not
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does not
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 get any response
of
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to
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 his evil things.
Good
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A good
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 person cannot live in
same
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the same
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 society.
Although
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criminal
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criminals
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is
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apply
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also
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staying
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stay
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 in the same place.
for example
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 no one can
stay
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have
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peaceful
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a peaceful
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life
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 if
criminal
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criminals
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 stay in
his
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their
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 city.
there
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There
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 will be no independence. Human
life
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 will turn
in
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into
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the
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apply
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difficulty.
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However
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persons
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person's
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 personal growth will stop.
ultimatly
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Ultimately
nations
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national
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 growth will be stopped if
individuals
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individual
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 personal
life
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 growth stops. On the
hand
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other hand
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 few people believe that criminals should not get any
punishment
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 it should be abolished in
whole
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the whole
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world
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 the reason because they trust people will definitely
Lear
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Learn
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 from their mistakes.so in future they should get
chance
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a chance
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 to repent
from
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for
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 their sins .
for example
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 in
immoshnal
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immoral
 changes if someone
kill
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kills
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other person
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another person
other people
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due to
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 misunderstanding. He is not born
as
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apply
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a criminal he
is
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has
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 done something without his conscious.he should
deffinenty
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definitely
 get another chance.he needs to clarify
with
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apply
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his issue not
punished
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be punished
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 with
death
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.
then
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 others
also
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get
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become
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 aware of
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this
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apply
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all
issues
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these issues
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.
To conclude
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 no doubt end of
punishment
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 will save
few
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a few
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 innocents
life
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 yet the increase
of
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in
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 crime rate will
effect
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affect
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 and spoils a peace and freedom of
a
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the
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 public and nation so disagreement
outweigh
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outweighs
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 the agreement.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction and avoid contradictory statements. Ensure your arguments are fully developed and organized logically.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas and paragraphs better, which can improve the flow of your essay. Ensure each paragraph clearly relates to the main topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
Proofread your work for grammatical errors and proper word choice. Some words are misspelled, and the overall clarity can be improved by using more precise language.
Task Achievement
The essay covers both perspectives on the death penalty, which shows an understanding of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of the essay is clear, with distinct paragraphs, which is good practice in essay writing.
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