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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadcantage

it is
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significant
 for individuals to take
risks
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, both in their professional lives and their personal lives,
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 my opinion
i
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 totally agree that there are many advantages over disadvantages because as we can see in our daily life
pleny
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plenty
 of the better
accievement
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achievement
achievements
 is come from challenges destructive , we may not improve our self if we tend to avoid
risks
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.
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other
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 hand, taking
risks
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 in order to enhance our goal is
worthful
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worthwhile
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,
wheres
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whereas
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, we have to set
plan
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a plan
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 and see through how measurement of
drawback
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drawbacks
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 in advance to reduce some bad
thing
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things
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. for
in stance
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instance
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 if
i
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 am not taking
challenge
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 to study abroad
i
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 may be
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still
 not move or complete any difficult task as
i
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 am doing now,so
instead
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 of
stay
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 in
the
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 comfort zone
i
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I
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 chose to accept
risks
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. in
constrast
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contrast
take
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taking
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risks
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 is not always
the
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 good option , so before we decide to do
any think
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anything
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 we should think twice and adjust the
drawback
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drawbacks
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 results.
as
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For
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 example, my sister
who
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apply
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never
touch
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touched
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any thing
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anything
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 about cooking but she rushly
open
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opened
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 her own
resturant
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restaurant
in
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apply
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result she
fails
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failed
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 and suffered from loss alot of money. in
conclude
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,
take
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taking
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risks
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 is
vitual
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vital
 for our
live
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lives
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 but make sure you can accept failure and plan
widely
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wisely
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 to cope
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 problem.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the organization of your ideas to create a clear logical flow. Each paragraph should represent a distinct point that builds upon your argument.
task achievement
While you provided examples, ensure that they directly relate to your points clearly. Strengthen your arguments by elaborating on how they support your main thesis.
language use
Pay attention to your grammar, punctuation, and spelling. Errors can distract from your message. Consider revising sentences for clarity and accuracy.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic and you express it effectively in your introduction.
task achievement
You included personal examples to illustrate your points, which adds a personal touch to your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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