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Nowadays. There is a lot of pressure and stress in many people’s lives. What are the causes of this problem? What could be done to reduce it?

There is no denying the fact that people these days live with some problems.
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 held belief that when someone
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probloms
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problems
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 with him, There is
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argument
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the argument
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 that opposes it. In
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essay
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i
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 will analyse the topic and what the solution
.
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one
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 hand, No one can live all the time
comfortble
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comfortably
 pressure and stress
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 normal.
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,
human
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 get
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 energy from challenges and in every challenge in our
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stressed
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.
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addition
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 there is a study published in 2008 by
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 concluded that
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in
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 more than 2 weeks will lose
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 power.
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, when someone
stay
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 at home
longe
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longer
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 he will stay in his comfort zone longer.
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other
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 hand, everyone
control
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his self
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himself
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 by how he
feel
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 at that time, and the reason
of
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 any problem he
act
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 with. First of all, I think most of
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our problem
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problem
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problems
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todays
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today
com
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 from ourselves and
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our feeling
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 so the only solution we should do is control how we feel
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 that moment by
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 the problem size, It is
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 possible to say that 90
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 of problems
humen
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human
 can take it easy if he do not gave it more than what it is worth. Ultimately, every issue has multiple sides, and it is important to carefully consider both the advantages and disadvantages before reaching a final judgment. Different people may have different priorities depending on their background, values, or personal experiences.
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 a universally ideal solution may be difficult to achieve, making balanced, well-informed decisions based on critical thinking and long-term impact can help address key concerns in a fair, practical, and sustainable way. In
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 there is no easy answer to
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 question m. On balance,
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,
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tend
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 believe that
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 life
com
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comes
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 when we can control
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our
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 feelings

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clarity
Improve the clarity of your thesis statement in the introduction. It should clearly outline the main points you will discuss in your essay.
structure
Ensure that your paragraphs have a clear focus and that each one develops a specific idea related to the topic.
relevance
Enhance your examples with more specific details that directly relate to the points you are making.
content
You have attempted to address both the causes and solutions related to stress, which shows a good understanding of the task.
coherence
Your essay has a logical flow, addressing the topic in a meaningful way despite some inaccuracies in language.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pressure
  • stress
  • workload
  • overtime
  • connectivity
  • anxiety
  • financial struggles
  • job insecurity
  • societal expectations
  • personal goals
  • overwhelm
  • economic challenges
  • balancing work and life
  • relaxation
  • mental health
  • self-care
  • coping strategies
  • stress management
  • mindfulness
  • well-being
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