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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (Duc

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (Duc
The table below provides details on the percentage of
consumptions
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consumption
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 of various products in five different countries in 2002.
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, it is clear from the table that ,the food, drink and tobacco category recorded the highest figures across all sections. At the same time, leisure and education spending have the opposite trend. They had the lowest numbers compared with other items.
According to
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 the data, clothing and
footware
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footwear
 goods have a
balance
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 consumption from the five cities with more spending for Italy by 16.36%.
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food
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the food
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 and drink section is the most required with a clear lead in the spending budget. Especially in Turkey, which reached its highest value at 32.12%.
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leisure
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the leisure
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 and education sector has the fewest number of consumers in every country. The average percentages were just 1.98% to 4.35%.
To sum up
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, we can conclude that, these goods
spent
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are spent
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according to
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 their importance in each region.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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