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An increasing number of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extend does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved. What are the drawbacks

There is no denying the fact That the main reason why in recent years there are
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 who prefer to study overseas more than studying in their countries.I will discuss in
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,studying abroad makes
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 obtain a lot of knowledge and skills during their journey in foreign countries
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: in my experience my friends who studied abroad have become more responsible in their lives. In other words, the more
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 travel to study abroad, the more capable
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 developing them .
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 it is a commonly held belief that studying abroad can bring benefits more than drawbacks , it is possible to be true.
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, there are aspects of drawbacks one of the main disadvantages is high fees
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 they not able to afford budget travel,
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 certain disadvantages of having difficulty acquiring new languages and
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 do not have any idea about that especially when they do not have any experience before.
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, many
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 have homesickness. On the one hand, the increase in the number of
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affordable careers for local
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 particularly, when companies order to hire a foreign language.
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 preferring to travel abroad to get experience and knowledge ,
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 , the government should afford local
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introduction
Your introduction could benefit from a clearer thesis statement that outlines the specific advantages and disadvantages you will discuss. Consider rephrasing to present a more structured viewpoint.
coherence
Try to ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea. Transition phrases can help your arguments flow better throughout the essay.
task achievement
Develop your points with specific examples; for example, provide personal anecdotes or statistics that illustrate the challenges or benefits faced by students studying abroad.
content
Your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and engages with both sides of the argument.
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You have made an attempt to discuss both the benefits and drawbacks of studying abroad, which is essential for addressing the prompt.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural exchange
  • global citizenship
  • academic credentials
  • job market competitiveness
  • international experience
  • language proficiency
  • personal development
  • economic impact
  • educational opportunities
  • networking
  • social integration
  • cultural adaptation
  • financial implications
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