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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the proportion of the
population
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 which are living in urban areas in four Asian countries (the
Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia) between 1970 and 2020 and
also
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 predictions for one and two decades. Units are measured in percentages.
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, the data clearly indicates that the percentage of the
population
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 in
cities
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 increases in each country.
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,
at
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 the beginning, the
Philippines
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 was the leader in the number of city residents,
meanwhile
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 Indonesia lagged behind.
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, in the future, it is expected that the overwhelming majority of the
population
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 of Malaysia will move to
cities
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 and take a leading position. At the same time, despite the fact that the proportion of urban dwellers in Thailand will double, it still will be in the
last
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 place.
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 the graph, at the start, all countries had
the
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figures
approximatelly
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approximately
 from 15% to 35 % and
then
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 all of them showed
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growth. The
population
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 of city dwellers in
Malasia
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Malaysia
 and Indonesia increased gradually until 1990 and
then
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 rose rapidly and in the future will reach a peak at around 80% and 60%, respectively. With regard to
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and Thailand, the rate of people who live in
cities
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 in these countries fluctuated over the years.
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, in 2040, about 50% of the total
population
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 of the
Philippines
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 will reside in
cities
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 and approximately 45% of Thais.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, philippines, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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