Some people think international cooperation has brought benefits to world environment protection, while some people think more benefits have been brought to international business. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that international cooperation.
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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that international cooperation has helped both the environment and
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many countries have worked together to protect the environment.
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, international
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cooperation
has assisted.
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, countries signed the Paris Agreement to fight
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change and cut carbon emissions. Another point to consider
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is that international cooperation has boosted global business. It is
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to say that open trade between
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countries
has made it easier for companies to grow.
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, it has created more job opportunities.
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, Many international companies now have branches in different
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trade
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despite
people having different views, I believe that it should continue in future.

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coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion could be more clearly structured. Try to rephrase your opinion and summarize the main arguments more distinctly.
task achievement
Some points you raised could benefit from further development or clarification. Make sure each point is thoroughly explained and linked back to your main argument.
language accuracy
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task achievement
You have attempted to address both sides of the argument, which is an important aspect of this essay type.
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You've provided relevant examples related to the topic, showing your understanding of international cooperation's impact.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global treaties
  • Paris Agreement
  • Climate change
  • Pollution control
  • Biodiversity preservation
  • Convention on Biological Diversity
  • Resource management
  • Trade barriers
  • Foreign direct investment
  • Economic growth
  • Technology sharing
  • Market expansion
  • Collaborative efforts
  • Environmental protection
  • International business
  • Cross-border initiatives
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