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In the modern world, many employees lack soft skills such as communication and working in teams. What are the main causes of this problem? What are the effects of the lack of such skills? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is a global
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 that workers do not have several abilities
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 as communication skills, Teamwork and
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problem-solving
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which leads to consequences like they cannot work as a team. In
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 essay, I will discuss the main of
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issue
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 and what are the consequences behind
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issue
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. I believe that soft skills are important for our life because
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 determine our value especially when we work in
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companies
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issue
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 is schools that do not focus on soft skills
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instead
insteed
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, Teachers

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task achievement
Clearly define and articulate the main causes of the lack of soft skills in your introduction.
task achievement
Elaborate more on the effects of lacking soft skills with examples.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your ideas by using appropriate linking words.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure proper capitalization (e.g., 'teamwork') and check for spelling errors (e.g., 'insted').
content
The essay addresses an important and relevant topic in the modern workplace.
structure
The intention to discuss causes and effects is clear.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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