In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or smalls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

nowadays, a lot of

people

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preffered

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preferred

prefer

shopping

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the large shopping centre rather than small local

shops

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can lead to

problem

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which

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many local

shops

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have closed

because

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the decrease

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customer

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customers

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essay will explore the negative development

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closing

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the closing

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local

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of local

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business

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with, many local

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country

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can reflect the economy of that

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, if local

shop

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shops

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growth

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significantly, it can be helpful for the state revenue from the tax.

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, if the traditional market

decline

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, it can lead to

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negative

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such

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as increasing the number of jobless.

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, the local market should

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from shutdown and

making

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it can

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with large

shops

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, one of

ways

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to introduce

local

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brand

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to the world is from how many

people

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using

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and

shopping

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that local

brand

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, if many native

people

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use

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international

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brand

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tourist

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dont

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attract

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use

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local

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, if many native

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use

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local

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the local

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brand

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, a lot of

tourist

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will be more

attract

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use

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local

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brand

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brands

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and shopping

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the

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apply

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local

shops

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, Because

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apply

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many

tourist

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tourists

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buy a local

brand

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and when they back to the

country

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this

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can be

way

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to advertise the local

brand

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. In conclusion, many local

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brand

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have closed

due to

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the increase of the shopping centres.

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can be

negative

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a negative

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impact

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the economy of the

country

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and can increase the proportion of jobless

people

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Content

You have identified the negative impacts of local shop closures clearly and provided a valid conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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244 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

local economy
consumer habits
personalized service
community spirit
economic decline
job opportunities
carbon emissions
traffic congestion
one-stop shopping
cultural impact
financial implications
shopping habits
community relationships
variety of goods
unemployment

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