With the wide use of computers and internet, people can study and work from home, with out going to school or company.do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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of the main disadvantages,
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of concentration,
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if someone is working from
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, can get distracted easily by family members or other
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which can give them more
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them like saving
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flexibility.which can end
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results.

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Make sure to articulate your main argument clearly in your introduction. You could explicitly state why you believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Try to improve the logical structure of your essay by ensuring that each paragraph has a clear main idea and develops it fully with detailed support.
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Use more varied examples to support your points. Providing specific scenarios can strengthen your argument and make it more persuasive.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and spelling to enhance the clarity of your writing. This also includes ensuring proper sentence structure and word choice.
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You've presented both advantages and disadvantages, which shows a balanced view on the topic.
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Your essay addresses a relevant and contemporary issue, which engages the reader's interest.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • productivity
  • work-life balance
  • cost savings
  • overhead costs
  • digital resources
  • online courses
  • commuting
  • physical barriers
  • stress reduction
  • remote work
  • virtual environment
  • self-paced learning
  • accessibility
  • distraction-free
  • autonomy
  • collaboration tools
  • time management
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