Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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greatly invest in artists. Some people argue that

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is unnecessary spending

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others believe that it is essential to support the

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industry

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.

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other public sectors

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as education, health and transportation are important,

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however

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I believe that the

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should not be neglected because it serves as a great source of income for a country and enhances

preservation

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the preservation

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of culture and tradition.

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allocate a

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funds to the creative

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and some citizens think it is a waste of money because other sectors

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as health, education and transport should be

priortised

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prioritised

prioritized

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. They are of the opinion that these public services should receive greater funding because they are more important.

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reports in Nigeria, there is a notable rise in mortality rates because of inaccessible and expensive healthcare services.

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of

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, many people suffering from chronic diseases

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as cancer, hypertension and diabetes die

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long waiting times.

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, I believe

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should

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be supported because it is equally important.

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, it is imperative that the creative

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should receive enough funding from

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because it promotes

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of cultural heritage and generates revenue for a nation via tourism. When students are educated on the history of their nation's

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,

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creates a sense of identity and allows them to deeply value their culture a lot more.

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, when

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spend more money on the creative sector of their countries

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as National Galleries, Theatres and Museums,

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enhances the appearance of tourist attraction sites thereby increasing the number of

vistors

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visitors

travelling across the globe to appreciate certain monuments and in turn generating income for

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.

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, The Government of the United Kingdom invests largely in

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arts

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and

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attracts many foreigners to visit various tourist

attraction

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attractions

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areas

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as The British Museum and Tate Modern. In conclusion,

governments

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support the

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industry

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but some people opine that it is unnecessary spending

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others believe that it helps a country's economy and preserves their cultural norms and practices.