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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the changing rates of crime in Panama
city
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in
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between 2010 to 2019.
Overall
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,
the
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burglary experienced
a prominent changes
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a prominent change
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 among other criminal events, and the number of car
theft
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thefts
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 and robberies has
some
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a
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 few fluctuations throughout the given period. In 2010, the highest number of criminal
event
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 was bulgary around 3500, and
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 it
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slight
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 increase for the next year to about 3600.
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, the figure dropped dramatically over the next four
years
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 to approximately1100, and
then
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 it relatively remained stable until
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the end of the period. The car
theaft
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theft
that
 started from about 2700, and
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 the figure remained unchanged over the next 2
years
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. The figure shows some fluctuations during the next six
years
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 and became the highest position among all was about 2900. In 2010, robbery began from around 600 and
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 it remained stable during the nine
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 in Panama
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Crime rates
  • Fluctuated
  • Significant spike
  • Consistent trend
  • Prevalent
  • Cumulative change
  • Enforcement
  • Correlate
  • Reduction/increase in crime
  • Categories of crime
  • Level of crime
  • Period of time
  • Analysis
  • Data representation
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