Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. you would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. write a letter to the hospital. In your letter - explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital -Say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do - give details of when you would be available for this work

Dear Sr/Madam,  My name is Shaki, I would like to express my interest in the current volunteer position available at your hospital. I am a tourism and hospitality student and
currenly
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currently
looking for some
working
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experience to
imporve
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improve
my customer service skills. I
belive
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I would be
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right person to fill
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position. I would
happy
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to provide accurate direction
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assisting
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the patient
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patient
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to transfer
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to other departments,
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also
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to help
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with anything they need. 
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that, I love to do any other jobs if needed. As long as I could get
traning
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training
and information regarding the
jobdesk
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job desk
before I perform. I will be available for
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position starting on 22th of
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, and I am free Monday to Friday from 7am to 3pm. Except for Wednesday, I will be free
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at 10am. Should you require
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information, do not hesitate to contact me. Please find my CV attached. Yours faithfully, Shaki

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Consider revising the introduction to make it clearer and more formal. A brief introduction of your motivation would strengthen your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and spelling, such as 'currently', 'improve', and 'believe' to enhance your overall clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Try to divide your points more distinctly across paragraphs to ensure each idea is separate and easy to follow.
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The letter has a polite tone and contains all the main points required by the task.
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Availability is clearly stated, which is important for the hospital's planning.
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