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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
line
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 chart provides key evidence about the
consumption
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 of fish and some different kinds of meat in European countries between 1979 and 2004. The units are measured in
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the figure that, Chicken was the highest per cent
in
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at
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 the end of the graph.
In addition
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, there was a decline
beef
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in beef
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consumption
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,
whereas
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 lamp and fish had a similar ratio
at the end
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in
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of
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 2004.
According to
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 what is shown, the
line
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 beginning from 1979 to 2004, chicken was started with 150
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. After that, the
line
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 fluctuated and
then
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 significantly rose
up
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from 1949 to 2004. It can be seen that beef started
consumption
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 from above 200
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. until 1989, the
line
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 dropped, and we saw reduced
consumption
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 of beef to 100
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. In terms of lamb, the
line
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 started from 150 and reached
to
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less than 100
consumption
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grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. Fish started from more than 50
grams
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 in 1979,
then
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 the diagram illustrated a slight
plunged
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plunge
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 throughout the interval of 1984 to 2004 and remained constant at less than 50
grams
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, consumption, grams, person, week with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption trends
  • steady increase
  • most consumed meat
  • relatively stable
  • general decline
  • pronounced decline
  • over the years
  • throughout the period
  • depicts
  • span
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