Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your . Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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it is a commonly held belief that the disadvantage is more
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advantages on using
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every day. There is
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are more common
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positive effects
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, the
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gives you
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to speak with strangers, and
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crucial things because that may
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, most of the
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do not have
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an awareness
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of the
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using
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, the children will spend most of their time playing and watching on their
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computers Another point to consider, nowadays
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possible to say that,
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fatter and
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unhealthy
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the amount of time they are
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sitting
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activity
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their health.
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not see and know is
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will
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view
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views
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,
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believe that the disadvantage of
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is a lot and without
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full
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the
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Consider revising the introduction to clearly state your stance on the topic and outline your main points. A thesis statement will guide your readers.
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Use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance the logical flow of your essay. This will help your readers easily follow your arguments.
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Try to use more specific examples to support your claims. This could add weight to your arguments and make your essay more persuasive.
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Remember to proofread your work for grammatical errors and sentence structure; this can enhance readability.
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You have a clear opinion on the topic, which is essential for task response.
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You discussed various aspects of the topic, such as social interaction and health issues, providing a broader view of the effects of computer usage.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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