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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting tha main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting tha main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates shifts in the quantity and type of fast food eaten by Australian youths between 1975 and 2000.
Overall
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, fish and chips consumption experienced a significant drop,
while
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 hamburgers saw a dramatic increase to be the most popular choice for youngsters.
Also
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, the amount of pizza consumed rose. The diagram displayed the level of fish and chips used started at 100 per
year
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 and it fluctuated at around the same level between 1975 and 1985. After that, it has steadily declined
year
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 on
year
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 to reach below 40 per
year
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 in 2000. The amount of hamburgers eaten has surged from around 15 to approximately 90 per
year
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 in 10 years and showed a stable growth from 1985 to 1995,
then
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 it stayed relatively unchanged.
Similarly
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, pizza consumption grew from around 10 to above 80 per
year
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 in two decades,
thereafter
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 it maintained at the same level.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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