The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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line graph illustrates the
number
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of people practicing 4 different kinds of sports in specific
region
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regions
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between 1985 and 2005. Between 5 different periods, we can see that there is a significant
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drop
in the Rugby rate between the 80s and the 2000s.
On the other hand
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, the
Tennis
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rate showed a steady increase. In 1885 Rugby
players
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were around 250, after 10 years the
number
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decreased to 200
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.
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, in 2000 there was a 25% drop in the
number
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until it reached 50
players
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by 2005.
Tennis
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on The other hand
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, the rate increased from 150 to 200 by 1995, which we can see that in that year
Tennis
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and Rugby
players
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were equal.
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,
tennis
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athletes
number
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grow to more than 210 by 2005.
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, The Basketball and Badminton athletes numbers fluctuated between the five periods, Basketball
players
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were less than 100, and Badminton were at the 50 level.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tennis, players with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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