With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?

In some countries,
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population growth causes
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amount of natural places. Protecting these areas is very essential for the population's health and
also
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economic development. To solve that problem, there are some practical solutions
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as establishing protected reserves and implementing restricted rules.
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with,
nature
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plays a crucial role in humans' mental health and personal well-being. In order to escape from the high level of stress of their busy life, especially in urban areas, people visit green zones for resting. It gives them an area, where they can get their energy back thanks to clean air and
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environment. It is one of the main goals of the
governments
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to provide
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places and protect
natural
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beauty there.
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, in Scandinavian Countries like Norway and
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Sweeden
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it is prohibited
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cutting
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of
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any trees for the purpose of building a facility.
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, saving wilderness is important to appeal
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which
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a lot of money to the
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budget,
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,
they
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help
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to increase the state's popularity. One of the main reasons for visiting any country is
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nature
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and these travels take
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place in
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governments'
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the governments'
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economy.
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, 36% of
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the incomes
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incomes
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of New Zealand, which is one of the most visited
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for
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green forests, great mountains and islands in the world,
come
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from tourism.
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, for the aim of saving natural beauty,
governments
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have to take necessary steps like creating protected zones and punishing those who break the rules about the safety of
nature
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.
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, in Azerbaijan, there are some places like "Qarayazi" and "Goy Gol" State Reserves, where wild
nature
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is protected from the potential harm of people
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as pollution, illegal hunting and so on. In conclusion,
although
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the increasing
number of
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popoulation
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population
leads
some
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destruction in
nature
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,
goverments
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governments
government
should focus on taking
safe
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these areas to provide civilization
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better life,
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moreover
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, to develop the economy.

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Be careful with minor spelling and grammatical inaccuracies, as they can detract from the overall clarity of your writing.
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You have effectively addressed the topic by discussing both the benefits of protecting natural places and potential solutions.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay's structure is organized with clear paragraphs representing different ideas, which is beneficial for readability.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • conservation
  • eco-tourism
  • mental health
  • well-being
  • stress relief
  • educational programs
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • climate change
  • carbon absorption
  • sustainable development
  • local economies
  • rehabilitation of ecosystems
  • natural habitats
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