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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summariae the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summariae the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts present the changes in ownership of electrical appliances (washing machines, refrigerators, and vacuum cleaners) and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in a country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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 of using electrical appliances is increasing,but the number of
hours
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 spent doing housework per week is decreasing over the years.
To begin
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 with, the
percentage
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 of using the washing machine was about 40% in 1920, and it increased to 70% in 1960.
However
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, in the period from 1960 to 1980, the
percentage
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 decreased to less than 60%. After that, it increased to over 60% in 2019.
Additionally
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, the
percentage
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 of using refrigerators started in 1920 at 0%, in the next period, it increased to more than 50% in 1940. And it continued to increase until it reached 100% in 1980 .
Moreover
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, the
percentage
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 of using vacuum cleaners started with 30% in 1920, and continued increasing until it reached 100% in 2000.
On the other hand
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, the number of
hours
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 of housework like washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning had decreased. In more detail, in 1920, the number of
hours
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 per week was 50
hours
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,and it decreased in 1940 to less than 40
hours
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.After that,it decreased to more than 10% and less than 20% in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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