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The pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The provided chart illustrates the process of ketchup production.
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, the process consists of 12 stages, beginning with the collection of fresh tomatoes and involving several preparation and boiling steps, ultimately ending with the product being bottled and delivered to consumers. In the initial stage, tomatoes are harvested and placed into baskets. They are
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 sorted to select high-quality produce, which is transported to the factory by truck. At the factory, the tomatoes are peeled and processed to remove stalks and seeds.
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, the vegetables are placed into a container and crushed. Before the boiling process, additional ingredients
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 as sugar, vinegar, and salt are added, and the mixture is left to simmer for two hours. Once boiling is complete, the ketchup is poured into bottles, which are
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 and subjected to quality control inspections conducted by food supervisors. In the final stages, the bottles are packed into boxes and distributed to supermarkets. Ultimately, consumers can enjoy the finished product as a sauce alongside various dishes.

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Consider adding a brief summary statement in the introduction to give an overview of the process you've described in more detail.
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Ensure that each stage of the process is clearly divided into separate paragraphs to improve clarity and flow.
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Include more specific details about the ingredients used in the process to enhance the completeness of your response.
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The essay provides a clear overview of the ketchup production process with well-structured stages.
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The use of specific terms related to the process (e.g., 'peeled', 'crushed', 'simmer') enhances the clarity of descriptions.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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