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Band 2.5

It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes rather than lots of cheaper clothes do you agree or disagree

In a
concurrent
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contemporary
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 era, fashion is inexorable.
pechasing
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purchasing
low
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apply
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quality
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of
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apply
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the dress
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dress
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dresses
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 is not duration indeed expensive
clothes
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benifits
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benefits
.
i
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I
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am completely agree
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completely agree
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 with
above
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the above
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 statement.
To begin
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 with, buying costly outfits always rewards us with
long lasting
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long-lasting
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 expenditures. Not only
but
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that but
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also
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 gives you respect.
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for
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For
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 example
generaly
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generally
 people spend a lot of money to buy 1 branded
clothes
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.
instead
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 of that we can get many cheap designer
clothes
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.
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however
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however,
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 it ends with
loss
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the loss
a loss
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 of money.because
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quality
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the quality
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 of
product
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the product
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 is not High.
Furthermore
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selection
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a selection
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 of innumerable
dress
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dresses
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 will waste our time.as it is not durable,
while
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 buying expensive
clothes
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take
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takes
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 less time with
best
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the best
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quality
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 Correspondingly, costly outfits
gives
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give
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 us respect with attractive
appealing
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appeal
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.since it is made
by
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with
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best
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the best
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quality
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 of material. It expresses paramount
of
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apply
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criterion.
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for
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For
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 example there was
a
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an
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 event with our company colleague.my friend came newly in the party after looking
the
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at the
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 branded dresses she recognised our company CEO.
Overall
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 it's
little
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a little
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 difficult to maintain expensive
clothes
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like
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by
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 washing,
ironing
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and ironing
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 but it gives us
wealthy
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a wealthy
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looks
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look
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. In conclusion, purchasing
cheep
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cheap
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quality
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 dresses may
be increase
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increase
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 the quantity but never
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quality
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the quality
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.yet high price
clothes
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gives
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give
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 a wealthy
looks
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look
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.and
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and
 increase respect.

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coherence and cohesion
Clarify your main arguments and make sure each paragraph clearly supports your overall thesis. Include topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader.
task achievement
Ensure that your language is accurate by reviewing grammar and sentence structure. This will enhance the clarity of your ideas and reduce confusion.
task achievement
Your essay presents a clear viewpoint agreeing with the statement regarding expensive clothes.
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You provided personal examples to illustrate your points, which can strengthen your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • long-lasting
  • cost-per-wear
  • economical
  • investing
  • ethical manufacturing
  • transparent
  • exclusivity
  • designs
  • mass-produced
  • accessibility
  • budget
  • fast fashion
  • trends
  • maintenance
  • dry cleaning
  • social status
  • psychological implications
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