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Band 3

It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes.rather than lots of cheaper clothes. Do you agree or disagree.

In
modern
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the modern
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 era, purchasing a costly dress.
compare
Wrong verb form
Compared
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then
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 cheap
clothes
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 are best.
i m
Verb problem
I
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 completely agree with
this
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 statement.
in
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In
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this
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 essay I am going to discuss
in
Correct pronoun usage
it in
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 detail.
Firstly
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 best outfit adds wealth & reputation in society.
while
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 cheap
clothes
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are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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never express your wealth status.
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for
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For
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 example
their
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there
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 was an office event
in
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at
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 my company.many
guest
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guests
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 were invited to the
part
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party
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.
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Whereas many
Correct word choice
Many
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 unknown people joined us, one of them was asking me about
CEO
Correct article usage
the CEO
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 of the company.but as soon he saw his costume he recognised exactly he
is
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was
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CEO
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the CEO
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 of
company
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the company
a company
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.
i
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I
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 was extremely surprised,So without our knowledge
people
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people's
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 outfits
add
Verb problem
have
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major
Correct article usage
a major
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 impact on others.
Secondly
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, buying
chep
Correct your spelling
cheap
quality
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 materials, are
time
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 consuming.as
time
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 matters a lot for
every one
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everyone
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. Collecting a huge quantity of
clothes
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with
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at
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 low cost is
Correct article usage
a completely
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completely
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complete
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 waste of
time
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 and amount, because of low
quality
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 it is not durable.
Whereas
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,
High
Correct article usage
a High
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 brand can add
u
Correct your spelling
you
 save
of
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apply
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time
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, with wealthy looks. It
also
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 gives you duration.since chosen by
high
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the high
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quality
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 of
product
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the product
a product
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. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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i
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I
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 would definitely go with costly
clothes
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 rather than cheap
one
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ones
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. Even though costly is difficult to maintain like washing,
ironing
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and ironing
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 even though it adds
best
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the best
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quality
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 with
long life
Add a hyphen
long-life
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 durability.
whereas
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 cheap
clothes
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 will fade and
Torn
Wrong verb form
Tear
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 early
due to
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low
Correct article usage
the low
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quality
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 of the product.so
i
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I
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 would like to go for expensive
clothes
Use synonyms
.

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task response
Ensure your introduction clearly states your position and the points you will discuss.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your points more clearly. Use paragraphs effectively to separate ideas.
coherence cohesion
Check for grammatical accuracy and spelling mistakes, as these can hinder clarity.
task achievement
You made relevant points about the importance of quality versus quantity.
task achievement
Your personal example about the CEO effectively illustrates your point.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • long-lasting
  • cost-per-wear
  • economical
  • investing
  • ethical manufacturing
  • transparent
  • exclusivity
  • designs
  • mass-produced
  • accessibility
  • budget
  • fast fashion
  • trends
  • maintenance
  • dry cleaning
  • social status
  • psychological implications
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