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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented diagram shows the comparison between the number of citizens in 4 different countries in Asia. In general, the Philippines was the most urbanized at the beginning, but Malaysia had the highest predictions.
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, Indonesia was the
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 one at the beginning of the given period. In 1970, Malaysia had 30% of people lived in cities. By the end of 1980, it reached 40%, which made it the most urbanized country in 1980. From
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 year to 2010 it sharply increased and by
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 year the percentage of its citizens was 70%. By the end of 2040, it is predicted that Malaysia will have 80%.
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, Indonesia had the smallest rating of urbanization in 1970 - it was only slightly higher than 10%. Despite
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, from 1980 to 2000 it had an upward tendency and became almost 30%.
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, by the end of 2020, it grew up and achieved 50%. As was foreseen,
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 tendency will continue and by 2040 there will be more than 60%. The Philippines accounted for slightly more than 30% of the urbanization in 1970. After that, from 1980 to 1990 it had a sharp increase and reached approximately 50%. Unfortunately, from 1990 to 2010 there was a negative trend. After that, there was an upward tendency and by 2040, the percentage is predicted to reach more than 50%. In comparison, in 1970 Thailand
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 only around 15% of
citizens
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its citizens
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. It had a growth until 1990, but for the next 10
years
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 it had a downward trend and ended up with 30% of urbanization.
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, from 2000 to 2020 there was a slight growth. As it is anticipated, from 2020 to 2040 it will increase to almost 50% of people who will live in cities

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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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