The diagram shows the process of cheese making summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where the relevant

The diagram shows the process of cheese making summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where the relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows the process of cheese making summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where the relevant
The
the
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apply
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series of events for
production
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the production
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of soft cheese. the total time period for the whole processor is around 20
hours
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.
Overall
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, there are five steps that are to be done in sequence
for making
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a final product. At
first,
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the processor is initiated by mixing two crucial components of cheese, which are water and milk. The mixture is
then
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kept to cool down at
temperature
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a temperature
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of 5
degree
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degrees
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for 2
hours
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.
Then
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a salt is added to the composition before permission next step
for
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apply
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which is
the
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apply
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fermentation. It is carried out for
same
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the same
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time period as
of
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apply
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cooling, but
35°c
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at 35°c
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.
Furthermore
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, the upcoming step includes evaporation of the blend at 100
degree
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degrees
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Celsius for 8
hours
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, resulting in the same production of steam under the effect of heat.
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further
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procedure involves the final and crucial step,
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that
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which
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is cooling and
filter
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filtering
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out of waste from the composition to
this
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performed for 8
hours
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at the cooling temperature of 5
degree
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degrees
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Celsius. The filters are used to gain the final product from the mixture and
removing
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remove
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the
waste water
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wastewater
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through another filter.
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, there are a number of
taskers
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tasks
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to be carried out
while
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making cheese out of milk and all the measures are to be done carefully in a proper sequence and flavour able environment conditions for
given
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a given
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time period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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