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‏In some countries, university students live far away from home and in another city or country while studying. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

there is no doubt
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is
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 a lot of
students
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they
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who
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travels
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to get their education in
another states
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another state
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.
Due to
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in
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their
country
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chance to continue their
study
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 . The
easy
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essay
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 will discuss both
of
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points of
views
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. On the first
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 the
students
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 who leave
his
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their
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country
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 to continue the learning process. They will get the positive
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.
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 of
students
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 who
study
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 in international
univerty
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university
 their have
highly
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 after graduation and 25
percent
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per cent
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 of
students
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 have
getting
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highly
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 salaries.In
another
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another word
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words
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 most of the
students
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 gain
his
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their
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skills
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 from experience in another
country
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.
In
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addition
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 they will build their language
skills
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 .morever the
students
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 will how can they depend on their self.
Thus
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 . There many
people
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 believe
the
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move
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our
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apply
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home
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 to
study
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 in another
country
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 will
improving
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improve
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 many things
for example
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the
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thinking , behaviorand enhance our character
.especially
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especially
 after
graduated
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graduating
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,
then
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 our family proud of us . On
other
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the other
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 hand
the
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apply
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study
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studying
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 in another
country
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 will be expensive.
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 university
costs
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is
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 very expensive for a lot of pupils.
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if did not get a scholarship from the government or university
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 will
hard
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 to
countinue
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continue
the
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my
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 education.
therefore
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 some of the
student
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students
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 have
nagative
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negative
 effects when they in far from
home
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home
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 sick they miss their family , friends
.even
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even
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country
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.
While
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 other
popils
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pupils
 have a bad experience with
new
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the new
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 culture they have a shock . And they might get shocked to see
anew
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new
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 foods maybe they will have a not good with a new food do not like it.Even the hard experience with hard
coummition
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commission
 with other
people
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dur
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due
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not
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does not
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a good
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good skills
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skills
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 in their language.
To
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 conclusion the significance difference between the
students
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.
There
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arguments
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are arguments
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 between the
people
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 who support
to
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studying
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study
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 in
another states
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another state
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.They prefer to
do
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have
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 new experiences in other countries
while
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 there
is
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a
people
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have
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who have
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a nagative
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nagative
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negative
 impact from
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study
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studying
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a
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apply
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far from
home
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.
In
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 my
perspective
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perspective,
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 I agree
with
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that studying
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study
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 far from
home
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 to gain my education and learning a new language and
skills
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 will
improving
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improve
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myself
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me
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 to make
a great opportunities
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great opportunities
a great opportunity
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 in the future

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coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea that relates to the topic. You can use topic sentences to guide your reader.
task achievement
Expand on your examples and support them with more details. This will help clarify your points and make your arguments stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammatical errors and sentence structure. Proofreading your work can help reduce these issues and improve your clarity.
task achievement
You raised relevant points about studying abroad, including skills gained and potential drawbacks like homesickness.
task achievement
Your essay attempts to present arguments for both sides of the discussion, which shows an understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • personal growth
  • cultural exposure
  • networking opportunities
  • academic advantages
  • homesickness
  • financial burden
  • adaptability
  • social awareness
  • globalized world
  • stress and anxiety
  • adjustment
  • living expenses
  • specialized courses
  • research facilities
  • professional connections
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