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Band 2

The best way to reduce, the amount of traftic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home to work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Is
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 today's world defiantly
the
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public
transportation
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 pivotal role in the city.
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 the proportion of the traffic in urban
city
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cities
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 increase in the period in these days. We have many different types of
transportation
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.
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 as
rialways
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railways
always
 metro,
bus
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buses
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,
cars
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 .
How ever
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 those issues
has
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 constarting views .
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eassy
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essay
easy
 I going to explain my opinion. On the
first
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other
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 hand
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traffic congestion is a significant challenge in many large cities around the world.
instence
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instance
 The issues
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 several reasons
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 as population growth, infrastructure , economic activity and urban planning .
firstly
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 as the population in cities increases
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the
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transportation
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 rises.
Moreever
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Moreover
 the
roads
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road
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 networks and
transportation
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 systems may not
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adaquate
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adequate
to
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for
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 citizens .
however
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 the infrastructure systems need to
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be development
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development
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 by the government .
therefore
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 a high level of economic activity often
lead
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 to
cars
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 usage.Local education access enhancing the availability of
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educational
education
eductional
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education
 within local communities can reduce the need for students and
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parents
prarents
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parents
 to travel long distance In conclusion
of
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traffic congestion

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas flow logically from one to another. Use more linking words to aid in the connection of ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to present a clear and concise introduction that outlines your main argument and includes a well-defined conclusion summarizing your points.
task achievement
Include more specific examples and detailed explanations to support your points, especially in discussing solutions to traffic congestion.
content
You have identified important factors contributing to traffic congestion in cities.
task achievement
Your essay attempts to address the task by discussing both traffic issues and solutions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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