You would like to join the local orchestra. Write a letter of application to the orchestra. In the letter: – Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice – Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate – Express your enthusiasm for music

Dear Sir,
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am inscribing
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letter to express my
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interest
in joining your orchestra . I am Anna currently studying
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Music
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school
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London , I would like to play
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the piano
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. I have been learning piano since my childhood, before it was passion now
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my future . I have done
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with a music company where
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worked as
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piano artist
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have done
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music shows with them. I feel that
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experience makes me a suitable candidate. I have been waiting for
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oppertuntiy
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opportunity
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would be a different experience for me. I can not wait to learn and explore . l look forward to hearing from you. kind regards Anna Mathew

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure all sentences are correctly punctuated and use capital letters where appropriate, especially at the beginning of sentences and for proper nouns.
task achievement
Try to include a few more details about your experiences, such as specific skills you have developed or pieces you have performed. This can enhance your application.
task achievement
You clearly express your enthusiasm for music and your experience in a music-related role, which is essential for your application.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a friendly tone that is appropriate for the context of an application letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • application
  • instrument
  • credentials
  • candidate
  • enthusiasm
  • music degrees
  • formal training
  • performances
  • collaborate
  • positive contribution
  • passion
  • orchestra
  • ensemble
  • genres
  • styles
  • experience
  • notable achievements
  • teamwork
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