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Band 3

Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

I agree with the given statement to some
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, that working in larger
companies
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 is more beneficial than
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 ones. Job seekers always
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pursue
 the big corporate opportunity rather than working for a small company. Let us discuss both points before reaching a concrete conclusion.  It is true that big
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 have more resources and space which help individuals to grow their skill sets and achieve their career goals faster.
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, large working places
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 provide extra perks to keep their staff motivated and prolific
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 end-to-year bonuses, discounts on gym memberships and health insurance coverage.
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, big
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also
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 have some negative impact on one's mental and physical health
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because
 of the constant pressure and competition to do your best at work. In the same way, small
companies
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 are more suitable for freshly graduated students, as they have the ability to learn faster. In
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workplaces
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people's
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 can develop their skill sets faster, as you need to wear different hats for work.
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, small
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 not provide
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 sense of stability,
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 its
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straining
 your relationship with your
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colleagues because
 of the
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work place
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 environment. To
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,
i
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 am partially agree with both statements. I believe choosing the
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company
 size will
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 upon the
persons
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person's
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 skill sets
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 their personal choices and goals.

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task achievement
Ensure that your thesis statement in the introduction clearly reflects your position regarding the topic, as well as previewing the main points you will discuss.
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Try to expand on your examples to illustrate your points more thoroughly, as this will enhance your argument and provide clearer context for your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Use more transitional phrases to improve the flow of your essay, which will enhance coherence and cohesion throughout.
coherence and cohesion
Double-check for spelling and grammar errors, as these can distract from your message, such as 'prusue' being 'pursue' and 'beacause' being 'because'.
content
You present a balanced view by acknowledging both sides of the argument, which demonstrates critical thinking.
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Your use of relevant examples, such as employment benefits and work environment, supports your argument effectively.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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