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The chart belows shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart belows shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart illustrates the number of US
households
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 their annual income brackets in the years 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, the number of
households
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in
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 the highest income increased significantly over the period and stayed at the top all the time.
In contrast
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,
households
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 which earned $75,000–99,999 remained stable and were the least common during the period. In 2007, approximately 29
million
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households
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 fell into the highest income bracket of $100,000 or more.
This
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 figure dipped slightly in 2011 to around 27
million
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 but rose markedly to over 33
million
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 by 2015.
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, the $75,000–$99,999 group saw a modest rise from about 14
million
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 in 2007 to roughly 15
million
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 in 2015.
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, the number of
households
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 earning less than $25,000 remained fairly stable at around 25 to 28
million
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 across the three years. The $25,000–$49,999 category peaked slightly in 2011 at nearly 30
million
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 but showed a minor decline by 2015. The $50,000–$74,999 group consistently remained the second smallest, with household numbers hovering around 21
million
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in
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each year.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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