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Band 3.5

In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What si your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

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Introduction
Recent period .
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Crime's
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show
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shows
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,and
book
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books
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 that
relvanteto
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relate to
crime
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 are
becom
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become
becoming
 viral among
community
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the community
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. In my
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personal
person
 view
abot
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about
this
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 statement . I believe that
,
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apply
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Crime
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's
show
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 is reflecting the real
live
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life
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 of
human
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humans
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.
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, The major benefit of these
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show's
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shows
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 is
make
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to make
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people
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 being aware, and
responsibil aboy
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responsible for
 their
action
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actions
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.
Body paragraph 1
According to
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 the above statement .
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Crime's
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Crime
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show
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shows
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is
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reflect the reality of
community
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the community
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. It's a real story that
happen
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happens
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 to someone in our
socity
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society
.
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, I believe that
every one
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everyone
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 could
faced
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face
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this
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 issue in
there
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their
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 life .
Also
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 ,
This
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show's
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show
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make
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makes
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audience
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the audience
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 become more careful
,
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apply
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and understand how seriousness of the
crime
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 .
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 , Parent in
Pakstan
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Pakistan
 leave their children
with
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to
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 their own
self play
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self-play
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on
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in
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garden
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the garden
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 so, Criminal
found
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find
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 it
that is
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 perfect time to kidnap them
. .
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.
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,
evrey
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every
 single news
show
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warning
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warns
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people
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 to
aviod
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avoid
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tirght
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target
 to
criminal's
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criminals
criminal
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.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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.
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Crime's
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Crime
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show
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shows
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 have
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a multipla
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multipla
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multiple
 of
definition
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definitions
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Such
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 as. abuse.insult,and bullying .All
these
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this
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 world is under the meaning of
crims
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crime
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, These
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show
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shows
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 could help
people
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 to survive .
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, The producer of the movie
inculde
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include
a numbers
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numbers
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 .incase if someone
suffer
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suffers
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 from the same issue,
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 numbers would help
and
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apply
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prevent
crime
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to happen
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from happening
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Conclusion
In conclusion. I firmly believe that
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crime's
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crime
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 series
is
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are
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 the major reason to prevent
the
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apply
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crime's
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crime
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.
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, it can be the reason to
solve
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prevent
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another
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other
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people
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 from
suffring
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suffering
 by
include
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including
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 numbers or places to solve
this
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 case .

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the structure of your essay. Make sure you have clear paragraphs: an introduction, body paragraphs for each main idea, and a conclusion.
task achievement
Work on grammar and word choice. For example, use 'crime shows' instead of 'crime's show' and 'individuals' instead of 'everyone'.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and explanations to support your points. This will make your argument stronger and more persuasive.
task achievement
You present a clear personal opinion on the topic, which is important for task response.
task achievement
You acknowledge both the positive and negative aspects of crime shows, showing depth in your analysis.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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