You recently spent a weekend with your friend in her/his new house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: •explain what you like about his new house •describe what you enjoyed most about your stay •suggest when and where you could meet next

Dear Smith, Hope you are doing great. I am writing
this
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letter to express my experience when I stayed with you at your new dream house.
Firstly
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, thank you for inviting me to your dream
home
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. I remember you told me that it took two years to build
this
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home
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. It's not only
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home
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a home
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it looks like it is
a
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apply
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big and elegant made with
lot
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a lot
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of
efforts
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effort
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. I really liked the infrastructure for your
home
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's walls
along with
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that
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the
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interior
designing
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design
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is fabulous. I have never seen
colored
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coloured
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beautiful paintings on the walls. Every corner of your house gives positive vibes.
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, what I found more attractive was
small
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the small
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swimming pool in your backyard. The way it is built is very different you can use it as
shower
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a shower
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tub and swimming pool.
Color
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The color
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theme is so elegant nice and bright color. Apart from these, different types of flowers in your garden
had
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have
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left
shock
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shocked
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. I was surprised that you have planted all the flowers which are very rare to see anywhere. I would not miss
chance
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the chance
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to come again to your house. I am organizing
birthday
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a birthday
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party for my husband next month and I will send
invitation
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an invitation
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card soon. Hope you will join us for
party
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the party
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. I look forward to your prompt reply. Best regards, Sam.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas more clearly within each paragraph. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea to enhance coherence.
task achievement
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary to express your thoughts more creatively.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is appropriate for a personal letter.
complete response
The descriptions of the house and garden are vivid and engaging, which adds interest to your letter.
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