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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some people regard eating meat as completely wrong. To what extent do you agree?

In
this
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 world, there are
the
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people
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how
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who
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 are vegetarian and
non vegetarian
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non-vegetarian
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. Different
humans
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 have different reasons for not eating
meat
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. In
this
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essay
eassy
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eassy,
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 I will discuss the reasons why some
people
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 think that eating
meat
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 is completely wrong and
other
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others
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 think
opposite
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the opposite
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 of
this
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 statement. On
first
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 side, human
being
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beings
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 who consume
meat
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 regularly in their diet, most of them
are
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agree with the thought that they
needs
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 to eat
the
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apply
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meat
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 for everyday proteins and
nutrutions
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nutrition
nutritions
 for their body.
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,
most
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of
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apply
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the
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western countries,
a
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meat
a slice of meat
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meat
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 is easily
avialable
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available
 and less costly than veg food. Adding to
this
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,
people
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how
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who
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 eat
meat
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also
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 think that it is a process of nature that animals eat one another and
humans
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 can eat animals.
Therefore
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, they think that eating
non vegetarain
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non-vegetarian
 food is good for their health. On
other
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the other
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 side, veg
people
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says
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say
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 that eating
meat
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 is completely wrong because they think that
humans
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 do not have
right
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the right
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 to kill any living beings.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, in some
regilons
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regions
 eating
meat
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 is
consiered
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considered
as
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a
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 crime,
for example
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India
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in India
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, there are many different
regilons
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regions
religions
 and cultures which
beleives
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believe
 that eating
chickhen
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chicken
 is
crime
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a crime
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. So,
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this
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these
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 are the two main reasons
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due to
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apply
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which
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why
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 some
humans
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are agree
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agree
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 with the statement.
To sum up
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, it totally
depend
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depends
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 on
indiviuals
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individuals
individual
that
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and
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 what they are choosing for themself. But I extremely agree with it and I believe that we do not have
right
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the right
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 to kill any
aniamls
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animals
 and birds.

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task achievement
Your introduction needs to clearly state your opinion on the topic instead of just discussing both sides.
coherence cohesion
Work on the structure of your paragraphs. Use clear topic sentences and ensure each paragraph has a main idea.
task achievement
Add more supporting details and examples to strengthen your points. This will make your arguments more convincing.
task achievement
You included different perspectives on the topic, which shows some understanding of the issue.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wrong
  • healthier
  • animals
  • conditions
  • killed
  • cruel
  • fair
  • diet
  • fruits
  • vegetables
  • better
  • longer
  • impact
  • production
  • land
  • water
  • energy
  • pollution
  • cultural
  • traditions
  • part
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