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the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now

the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now
The diagram
illustrate
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 the floor plan of a public
library
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befor
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for
 two decades and
present
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the present
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 day.
Befor
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Before
 20 years ago when you
enter
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entered
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 the
library
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 you would see tables and chairs and the information disk on your
right
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 ,
nowdays
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 it
replaced
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is replaced
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 with
cafe
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a cafe
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 with the removal of tables now the
library
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center
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 is empty leaving the
library
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 divided clearly to left and
right
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 sides . The
right
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 side backdays contain only three sections which
was
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 the main disk,non-fiction adult
books
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 and
children
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books
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 .Where it is transformed now to
cafe
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the cafe
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 at the
right
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 of the entrance ,
information
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an information
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 desk in the middle of the adult fiction
books
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 and self-service machines .In the
right
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 corner of the
library
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 is a lecture
room
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 . on the left side of the entrance in the past was a reading
room
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 for
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
magazins
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magazines
magazine
 and adult fiction
books
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 in the middle and on the left corner was a
room
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 for computer games,CDs and videos.Now when you enter the
library
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 you
could
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can
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 find the computer
room
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 first
then
Linking Words
 all types of
books
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 in the middle
last
Linking Words
room
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 which
contain
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contains
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children
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children's
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 fiction
books
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 ,a
sofas
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, and space for storytelling events.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, right, books, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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