Some people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish details of people’s private life, while other’s think it should be controlled ? Discuss both views

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believe that social media can publish
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's details ,
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. Others argue that media have to be controlled. On the one hand,It is believed
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some
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that,the media have the green light to spread anything about
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's lives even if it is very private.In fact,some
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do not
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about what was published about
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,because they just focus on the views and how they will be famous.what
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mean,publish news about any person can make
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person famous.
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,they chose to be famous so they have to be patient.

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task response
Your introduction needs to clearly state both views about media publishing private details. It's also important to properly format your essay with clear paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to connect your ideas better. Use linking words like 'however' or 'in addition' to show the relationship between different ideas.
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Provide more examples or reasons to support your points. This can help clarify your ideas and make them more convincing.
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You introduce the topic, which is a good start for the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Freedom of Press
  • Democratic society
  • Public interest
  • Transparency
  • Accountability
  • Investigative journalism
  • Privacy invasion
  • Psychological impact
  • Ethical standards
  • Legal frameworks
  • Regulations
  • Media scrutiny
  • Case studies
  • Moral boundaries
  • Public figures
  • Corruption
  • Misconduct
  • Stress and anxiety
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