Some people regard eating meat as completely wrong. To what extent do you agree?

There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether
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consuming
meat
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is
benefical
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beneficial
for
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individuals
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or not. For many benefits for individuals
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and
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community
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the community
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, I totally
dissagree
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disagree
that eating
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is
wrong
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cunsomption
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consumption
.
First,
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meat
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consumption
have
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many benefits for
people
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's
life
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. Scienties
proef
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prove
that
meat
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is a
fundmental
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fundamental
source of
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proteins
brothers
.
It is clear that
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our bodies have
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serios
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serious
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for
proten
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protein
.
This
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due to
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the fact that the building
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strong and healthy
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muscles
for our bodies. As
result
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a result
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of that, eating
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meats
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meat
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must be one of the main
dusies
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duties
on
people
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's
taples
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tables
staples
tales
.
However
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, eating
meat
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can build
a
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apply
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strong
realationships
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relationships
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in some
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cultures
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. presenting
meat
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in some cultures was
a clear evidence
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clear evidence
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for
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their
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respect
. For
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example
, presenting
meats
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on the meal in some regions in
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shows
to
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people
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that have
a
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great
respectness
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respect
. As conceconence of that,
this
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will let to build a strong
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relationships
relationship
amoung
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among
people
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.
Second,
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eating
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meats
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meat
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can
benefiy
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benefit
our
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society
in many aspects.
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is
obveoisly
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obviously
seen in
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the agriculture
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industry
which
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where
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the
increasing
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in
meat
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consumpition
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consumption
can
maxmise
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maximise
farmers
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farmers'
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revenue. As
result
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a result
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of that, the total income of the community would increase too.
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Therefore
, eating
meats
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can
refluct
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reflect
to consuming more foods for animals.
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, the increase in animals will let to feed them more food. As
result
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of that,
this
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will
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produce more food for those animals which can be a great chance for
people
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to create a new
bussniess
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business
.
To sum up
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, eating
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meats
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meat
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can have both positive and negative impacts
for
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on
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individuals and
community
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the community
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. In my opinion, there are many good outcomes
can
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that can
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overcome the negative impacts.

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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
Make sure your introduction states your position clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use better grammar and spelling. This will help your ideas be clearer.
Task Achievement
You have given some reasons for why you think meat is important.
Task Achievement
You included examples from culture and agriculture, which is good.

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Linking words for giving examples:

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  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
Topic Vocabulary:
  • wrong
  • healthier
  • animals
  • conditions
  • killed
  • cruel
  • fair
  • diet
  • fruits
  • vegetables
  • better
  • longer
  • impact
  • production
  • land
  • water
  • energy
  • pollution
  • cultural
  • traditions
  • part
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