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In some developing countries, it is difficult to get good teachers to work in rural areas which can have a negative impact on the education of children in those rural communities. Why do you think good teachers do not want to work in rural areas in developing countries? What could be done to solve this problem?

Nowadays it is hard for educational centers in rural
areas
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 of non-developed
countries
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 to find
high-qualified
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highly qualified
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teachers
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.
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the general educational level of children in those
areas
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. From my point of view,
teachers
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 who
acquired
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 a high degree, seek
for
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career
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 development and high salaries, which can not be provided by rural communities. Government actions towards
development
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the development
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 of infrastructure and provision of
career
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growth
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,
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 can create a comfortable environment for
teachers
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 to
work
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 and educate students
of
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in
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countryside
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the countryside
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.
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 with, schools in rural communities provide inconvenient conditions for children and
teachers
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of
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in
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 those
areas
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.
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 because developing
countries
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 nowadays focus more on the
growth
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 of their central cities, building new amenities, namely shopping malls, cultural places and skyscrapers . Access to all
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this
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 facilities in urban
areas
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,
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 makes it more convenient for
teachers
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 to
work
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 in educational
centers
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centres
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.
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 , there is a high demand for qualified
teachers
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 in big cities, with suggested high salaries and
career
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growth
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.
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 , schools in
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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 rarely have trustable facilities
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 as reliable electricity or technical resources.
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 makes the quality of
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 and ability to deliver information to children poor and
uneffective
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ineffective
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. To solve
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 issue,
assistance
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the assistance
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 of the nation is irrefutable and can significantly change the trend in a positive genre. The government of the
countries
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 can create new educational programs for
teachers
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 to gain some experience from working in both rural and urban
areas
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.
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 is a common practice in developed
countries
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 and already shows some positive effects on the life quality in countryides. Rural communities receive quality education and more opportunities in their educational development,
while
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teachers
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 get more experience and advantageous comments in their portfolio describing their moral characteristics, which will possibly assist them in their
career
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growth
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. In conclusion, even if in
the
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developing nations it is hard to find qualified
teachers
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 to
work
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 in rural
areas
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, and solve the problem of poor level of education, the government can provide citizens with new exchange programs where
teachers
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 could deliver their knowledge with benefits for them and students of the schools.

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