The cost of international travel is decreasing, and tourism is increasing in many countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the rising trend of tourism for countries? AAA

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being reduced in many
countries
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,and
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is being developed in different
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benefit
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trend
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situation ,because of increasing outcomes ,
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crucial issues to
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the animals. On one hand,
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has become a major catalyst of
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economical
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system
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Countries
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,which have
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attractions ,are more developing rather than
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which do not increase their
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.It's cause of profits,which
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activities
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in the travelling
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effect to the country that country will not depend
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economic
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,Thailand has been able to attract many tourists ,using
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their
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privileged
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nature
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sides,like
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an island
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island
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and beautiful lush green beaches.Money
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earned from
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can impact to
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more
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essential buildings and influence
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the
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other vital conditions.
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,ecological problems might start developing caused by visitors to
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enviroment
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environment
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are belonging
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to a group of rare species,
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types may face
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damage from the consequences of harm that people do the
nature
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,there are decreases
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and ocean
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that
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to
the
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nature
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Enviromental
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all sides of
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. In conclusion,
pros
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of rising
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trent
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trend
impacts
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to
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the
economical
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system
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,
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cons of
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trent
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trend
can cause essential problems to the
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environmental
system
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,in the result can harm
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animals.

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coherence and cohesion
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Add specific examples that directly support your points to strengthen your argument.
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Your essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of tourism, which is a good approach.
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You provided relevant examples to illustrate your points, such as the case of Thailand.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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