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The graph below shows greenhouse gas emissions(GHG) by country in 2014 and 2016. Summarize the informatin by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows greenhouse gas emissions(GHG) by country in 2014 and 2016. Summarize the informatin by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below indicates greenhouse gas
emissions
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 in
country
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the country
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 from 2014 to 2016. It is evident that the majority of the
GHG
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emissions
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is
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from china
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china
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China
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, and it tends to become releasing more
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 to 2016. China has a majority of the
GHG
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emissions
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comparing
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 to other
countries
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, with the range between 12100 and 12400. When it is 2014, with the 12100 and 2016, with the 12300. It almost doubles the amount of
GHG
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emissions
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with
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United
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states
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, with the range between 6100 and 6300.
Furthermore
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, The other
countries
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, which are eight have
the
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 range between 700 and 2900,
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that
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 is a huge difference that consuming
the
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apply
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GHG
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emissions
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. There
is
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 three distinct features, which are increasing, same, and decreasing. Most of the
countries
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 tend to increase to release
GHG
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emissions
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, with the 6 of 10.
Second,
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three
countries
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 including Germany, Mexico, and Brazil have the same amount of
the
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GHG
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emissions
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.
However
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, The two
countries
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 including Japan and
United
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the United
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 States tend to decrease the
GHG
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emissions
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, ghg, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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