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The charts show what ik graduated and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college. Summer is the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show what ik graduated and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college. Summer is the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
chart
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ullistrate
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illustrates
 who were
go
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going
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 into full-time
work
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 or
part time
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part-time
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, voluntary
work
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 , when they leaving college it
was compare
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was compared
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 between graduated and postgraduate in 2008 .
overall
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 , all of
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the graduated
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graduated
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graduates
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 and
postgraduate
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postgraduates
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 after graduation they go into full-time
work
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 and
they
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the
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chart
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 shows the least range of voluntary
works
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work
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. The
part time
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part-time
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work
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 for graduates
around
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was around
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 177535 and the postgraduate 2535 ,
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 , the voluntary
work
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was approximatly
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approximatly
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approximately
 (3500 and 345 ,respectively ),The most
arange
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arrange
 on the
chart
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 for each
students
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student
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it
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apply
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which
full time
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full-time
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work
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that
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apply
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shows nearly 30000 for graduates and 2725 for postgraduate ,
then
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 the
last
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chart
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 in the middle range its around (14235 and 1625 ,respectively ).

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate
  • postgraduate
  • full-time work
  • part-time work
  • further studies
  • internships
  • volunteer work
  • career prospects
  • job market
  • academic pursuits
  • transition
  • employment opportunities
  • proportions
  • analysis
  • support systems
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