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. Some people believe that children should be involved in making their school\'s rules. Others say that only adults should make the school\'s rules. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

In today's fast-paced world, the topic of evaluating school rules by
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 has sparked considerable debate among many people. Some people believe that students must have
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 grant or a
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the
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decisions.
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 that they should
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 restrictions on them to not have access or
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privileges
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 some degree.
This
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 and a clear opinion on the matter. Ultimately
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 am inclined to support that there must be a ban to some
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.
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 supporting the rule restriction is that it can
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 impact on

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Make sure your introduction clearly states both views and your opinion. It helps the reader understand your position.
coherence and cohesion
Try to make your paragraphs flow better by using linking words like 'firstly', 'however', and 'in conclusion'.
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Provide specific examples to support your ideas. This makes your argument stronger and more convincing.
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You introduced a clear topic of debate which is good for engaging the readers.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear opinion which is important in this type of essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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