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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a common belief that officials' personal life should be shared
to
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 the public in
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newspapers
. I completely disagree with
this
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statiment
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statement
. Because, those shared
informations
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information
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 are not only dangerous to
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politicans
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politicians
,
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 but
also
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 their family. In
additions
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,
this
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 may decrease the belief towards
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politicans
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politicians
 and their decisions,
due to
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wrongdoings
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their wrongdoings
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of
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them
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in their daily life. First of all, sharing private information
such
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 as living
adress
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address
 and frequently visiting
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a place
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place
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places
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 of officials can
couse
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cause
 a potential danger to
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politicans
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politicians
 and their family members, since there may
have
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 some
peope
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people
 who do not like them or the
enemy
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enemies
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 of the
nations
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nation
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. that's why, with those
datas
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data
dates
, they might try to kill them.
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, in
19th
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the 19th
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 century,
Nigeria
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politican's
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politicians
politician's
 information leaked to the public. As
the
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 result, most of them
is
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are
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 killed by enemy spies
while
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 others
forse
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fail
 to hide or relocate in order to survive.
Secondly
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, bad
habbits
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habits
 and sins of
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politicans
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politicians
 that happened in
their
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 past can
damege
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damage
trust
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the trust
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 of citizens.
Although
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 they are changed and trustworthy, people neither follow nor respect them.
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, During the presidential election of Uzbekistan, one of the
candidants
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candidates
 crime history
exposed
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was exposed
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 in social media.
Afterward
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, most of the voters
refuse
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refused
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 to elect him
dispite
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despite
 the fact that he served his sentence and
become
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became
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 a fair person. in conclusion, Exposing
personal
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the personal
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datas
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data
 of
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politicans
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politicians
you
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apply
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will not only create a potential threat to them and their family, but
also
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 you will
damege
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damage
public's
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the public's
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 trust
toward
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in
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 them.

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language
Make sure to use correct spelling and check for grammatical errors. For example, change 'statiment' to 'statement' and 'couse' to 'cause.'
coherence
Try to improve the flow of your ideas. Use linking words and phrases to connect your sentences and paragraphs better. For example, use 'firstly,' 'secondly,' 'moreover,' and 'in conclusion' to help organize your thoughts.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples for your points. This will help strengthen your argument. Also, consider explaining why the examples you gave support your point further.
task achievement
You have clearly stated your opinion in the introduction, which is important for task achievement.
coherence
Your points about safety and trust are relevant and understandable, which makes your argument clear.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intrusion
  • accountability
  • transparency
  • sensationalism
  • privacy
  • public interest
  • collateral damage
  • precedent
  • responsible journalism
  • exploitation
  • democratic processes
  • media culture
  • balance
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